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Old 21-05-2008, 01:46 AM   #8 (permalink)
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Keep up the good flow
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apart fromt that it is good read Keep going
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*error I think*

**Thats why you should never hit people like that. If you are nice to others they will continue and be nice to you and even more. The more you think about how you hurt others the better you will become.**

**Shouldn't it be like**
*** The less you think about how to hurt others, a better person you will become.***

In context to the conversation the child was not talking about how he hurts other people, he is saying how he is not punished and is showing that he does not consider another persons feelings. The edited statement you have there (I feel) would not flow well with the conversation in my mind. People generally don't think very complex when confronted with a surreal situation was also a factor (However it may be slight) factor.
Also, I admit that this would indeed normally sound fine orally...
but it is mostly the reason it is not as you edited is because of character.
I believe that it would not suit the character of "Kyon" if he indeed said this. Since (My) Kyon is speaking from his heart there and not his logic his statements would not sound as appealing as it could.
To summarize, it's all about Psychology and what reaction would get the best reaction as someone would belive before saying it.
Anyway, I'm blathering and If I did not make concise standpoint and justification, I'm sorry (Gettin' a little tired so sometimes I don't notice).
Thanks for your Criticisms, I really appreciate them.
Next issue will be out soon.

Last edited by Genjuu Mugon; 21-05-2008 at 02:05 AM. Reason: One of sentances was WAY out of place.
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